Now, this is a truly embarassing exercise. Luckily, I started writing less than a year ago, and so still haven't burnt all my beginner mistakes (and still have time and ability to make new ones). I have many to choose from, but I truly thinks this one is the most embarassing. Will you look at me with the same eyes after this? Especially considering that I was quite convinced this equalled Poe at his best when I wrote it:
Ashes inside ashes
Water upon water, I see
Ocean, you give me embraces
Waves, you come from foreign places
Surface over surface - and me
Air over air over air - oh
Heaven, why are you receding?
Clouds, will you take me on your wing?
Death under death under death, so
Far away from far away I
Drown in water under water
Deep, you lead me to the slaughter
Up under down and the wrong way
Surface is not surface, I see
Mirage, the upside-down is me
Lost, in a labyrinth at sea
I am not me, no never me
Paper inside paper - they must!
Folding my brain inside itself
Me, I was my own dark little elf
Brain inside brain I turn to dust
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Was there any prize money for crappiest poem? I accept Amazon gift certificates.
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-Svein Olav
[This message has been edited by Solan (edited May 15, 2002).]
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