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Old 09-07-2018, 12:17 PM
David Callin David Callin is offline
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I like it, Rick. On the first few readings the abrupt - I thought - line breaks of the opening bothered me, until I came to think that they might be meant to stand, in some way, for the interruptions in your lunch occasioned by the visitors.

I think the ending is excellent.

Cheers

David
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