Thread: Novel into verse (Renamed ''Things That Scared You Shitless as a Child... or Since"
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Unread 06-28-2018, 01:41 AM
Mark McDonnell Mark McDonnell is offline
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John,

Apart from the awkward rhyme and enjambment of peep/up that's a better rhyming poem than the one you currently have on met.
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