Appreciate the read and comments. Thank you giving me some things to think about. I'm also on the fence about "my" at the end, and "greatest."
John / Ashley,
I appreciate your feedback, getting insight into the effect the poem has on you. It's certainly true that "you can't please them all." I'm not sure it's a good idea for someone to try. I appreciate seeing why/where/how this piece might have failed so I can try something different in the future.