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Unread 05-14-2002, 11:47 AM
Roger Slater Roger Slater is offline
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Carol, you call that bad! You obviously don't know much about writing truly bad poems, I'm afraid. I've written countless poems far worse than what you posted here.

In fact, not to be too insulting or anything, but you need to make this poem a lot, lot worse. I'd do a line-by-line, showing you exactly how you can butcher the syntax and the meter further, and identifying spots where the meaning came across a bit too clearly, but you didn't post your poem for critique but to invite others to post their own bad efforts.

With all modesty, though I have a vast selection to choose from, I'd say that the following poem is hard to fault for being too good:

OVILLEJO

Are you one who can guess the plot?
I'm not,
even when the play's been played.
Afraid,
I laugh at what the bows imply.
To die
is just to sleep on stage then fly
on lofty currents of ovation.
On the whole, a fine sensation.
I'm not afraid to die.
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