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Unread 09-03-2019, 06:21 PM
Erik Olson Erik Olson is offline
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Mark,

This is an effective, good poem. I fancy that the list construction lends itself to an airy effect and of things in stasis, which strikes me as apt for evoking the dog days of summer when everything seems static in the sultry heat. My only nit is that the brand name HB on the pencils seems rather incidental than integral in contrast to the other details in the poem. Much enjoyed.

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Erik
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