I agree with all that Rhina and Tim have said. Jim's best, which is saying a lot.
Not that the rest of the poem is chopped liver, but I love the music and the emotion of:
And though the hour has come for giving thanks
for time spent fishing on so many banks
I think "so many" is a master stroke. (I hear a wonderful double iamb in "...FISHing on SO MANy BANKS", though it can be said "...FISHing ON so MANy..." as well, and in a way I can hear both at once and the beat seems to float and hover about in the vicinity).
[This message has been edited by Roger Slater (edited December 20, 2003).]
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