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Old 08-14-2018, 07:21 PM
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Andrew —

When I was a kid, we spent a lot of time outdoors in the west, & I saw many things in the clouds of the Arizona skies.

S1L2 as is:

looking at clouds—first
....

I think deleting first would improve the poetry, so, S1:

All day I lay
looking at clouds—


The reader can infer the sequence from then, S2L1.

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