Chris:
Gay personal ads are so funny aren't they? I like this, but I think you can do much more with it. My favorite is the opening, which is just spot on. But the drive a bus line is rhyme driven and I think you can do more with people who tell you every stat they have except their IQ. I think if you er uhm probe deeper, this could be more than an exercise. The uh raw material is certainly there. This is a giggle--but I think it can be a belly laugh. Why should nuns have all the fun (with apologies to Jan)?
nyctom
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