Thanks for the suggestions, John. I have tried to respond to most of them, but I did not wish to add an "and" to "never must he forsake her." I think the line between "he must not forsake her" and "he must never forsake her" is not very crucial to the meaning. I inverted the syntax for emphasis. I am sorry about the delay in responding. I was traveling in the past few days, could spend little time online, and had none of my translation tools with me.