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Unread 05-16-2021, 08:55 AM
Martin Elster Martin Elster is offline
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Originally Posted by F.F. Teague View Post
Thanks for your suggestion re. line 8. What do you think of an en dash following 'scrap' and then 'I got rocks an' big ridges an' t'ings'? I'd like to keep 'I got rocks' as it reminds me of 'rocks that I got' (J-Lo).
Yup, that works perfectly! You got to keep "got," as it enhances the vernacular. The em dash is what I would have suggested, too. You're really good at emulating dialects. I wish I could do that.
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