I guess I don't share Alfred's concern about the last couplet, though I chuckled over Ereme's proposed solution. Nor do I agree with Hector. It is true that there is little density and minimal charge to the language of this poem. But that's because the voice is so utterly relaxed, so very conversational. I've had the pleasure of sharing a drink with this poet on the waterfront in Newburyport, and I can imagine him hoisting a brew and simply saying this elegant sentence. No, I'm with Rhina. Students, you want to write a sonnet? Here's how it's done.
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