Finally I have a few minutes to comment on these.
Ralph, I think your Honest Iago's Villanelle very clever. It moves along quite smoothly.
MS, I think this works pretty well. Based on your explanation of it though, I think you have a mixed metaphor in the final stanza. Are they to be both jewels in his crown and hearts on his scrolls? As has been pointed out, it does have an extra stanza.
Kate,
Very masterful! It had such a scuzzy feel to it -perfect!
Julie,
I really liked the way you were able to enjamb the lines to twist the meaning. Very nice.
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