Sharon, I actually think that poem was charming, maybe with an exception of the last stanza. Put it up in Met 1 and work with it.
Tom, your poem was the most boring one so far; I had to slap myself awake several times.
Robert, it's good to see I am not alone in continuing to write things unworthy even of destruction by fire. Your poem made me laugh out loud. It belongs in some classic pantheon of poems that took their metaphor too far or something.
Why don't we analyse each of these poems to see what went wrong, and make an anti-poetry-learning website: Common and uncommon pitfalls in the writing of poetry.
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-Svein Olav
[This message has been edited by Solan (edited May 15, 2002).]
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