Hi Fliss,
I find your second poem here crackles with a kind of energy that invigorates the narrative. The plot thickens! My favorite line is your close - "I like the way he watches me" - but the whole thing is as crisply narrated as ever, and i do like the slow unfolding of what is to occur.
I have no idea what the title means BTW. Something about the Financial Times? :-) Also, glad to have helped!
Oh and maybe, for meter, "chuckles, rolls" and "each bandage"?
Cheers,
John
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