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Hi Joe, This feels rather dashed off without much effort put into the poetical aspect of the imagery you conjure.
I wondered, too, about the number of children being read to (2? 3?)
And I can't figure out why the final couplet sounds like a rehashing of the two lines that precede it.
It's fine to keep as is as a family keepsake, but I am left wondering what the point of the poem is. I am assuming it is to capture the memories of reading at bedtime to your children, so I think there is fertile ground there to develop it. But as is, it doesn't take me anywhere.
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