David, thanks for reading and I'm glad you like it. Also, thanks for the typo catch. It is "planning."
Cameron, I'm glad you read this one. You know what I value most about the shape and sound of a poem. The last line has been tough but that was inevitable. I like what I have now though there is discussion of making "here" to be "there."
Thanks, Brandon for rereading it. As I said, that damn last line.
Carl, I'm pleased in a cocky way that I changed the last line before you got to it. You've been a great help by pointing it out each time. I'm pleased you like this one.
Nemo, thanks. I always love it when you comment on my poems and other people's poems. I was sacrificing the poem for the image and the image's possible consequences. I fell into writing this one without much thought, which is usual, but I realized what I wanted it to do sooner than usual. What you and Cam said has centered my thinking these last couple of days. I've written poems in so many different structures and styles. I guess that is good but I want to settle down. It's time.
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