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Unread 05-31-2020, 12:30 PM
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Your facility with rhyme and meter makes this light verse for you. Nonetheless it's in 'the deep end' so a few comments on meter in addition to favorite content that will fall in the zone of take/toss.

Here are two places whose meter I found problematic.

I. L11 "in politics and "

II. L10 "for cul-de-sac propaganda "

I thought the wry use of heroic couplets a deadly touch. I smirked the whole way through.

I loved the "An orange sky / burns in the distance " allusion to Trump a terrific turn of phrase.
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