Joe, I have to first say something that may sound like an excuse but isn't. I've sometimes have trouble concentrating and it seems to be a little worse the last couple of days. So maybe that's why I'm having so much trouble understanding this poem. I've read it several times and picked up that there is skiing and a couple and some Christians? I think they're on a Ferris Wheel at the end. I also think it's essentially a poem about loving your partner? But I'm having trouble bringing it together as a whole and am not sure if what I think I see is right.
The pace slips close to what I think of as "one damn thing after another." It moves by so fast it is hard to hold onto what should be held. Maybe some of the actions, and events, could be taken out and more focus applied to one or two? That would slow the pace and give more space to let out what you want to come out.
That's all I have right now. I do want to see it change and maybe will have more to add as it does.
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