Call me a political junkie, but that locker line (14) immediately brought to mind the current US election discourse
. All the health "freaks" are women, with six lines dedicated to the one who is basically (and literally) asking for it!
I agree with the DG that the colloquial tone works in the context, but I disagree with him/her that the Petrarchan rhyme scheme is overly demanding, and that the poet showed virtuosity in using it.
An interesting vignette, but for me, it's a one-read.