Hi Jim,
Thank you for the suggestions. (And I saw your message with more clarification, that helps!) I know that I don't really want to linger on the reactions from folks in town. I'm not sure I entirely follow your comment about reducing emotional involvement, but I could see taking out/altering the first line of stanza two so it's less about the narrator's exasperation and more about what's actually going on.
Application's due on Friday (already somehow?!), so this is all good stuff to know. Thanks for your help!
Ella
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