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Unread 12-30-2023, 07:31 AM
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Originally Posted by A. Baez View Post
I’ll consider it, but the current phrasing did seem an accurate representation of the reality upon which this poem was based.
I hear it as a cheer breaking into a quiet poem. You’ve further emphasized the contrast with line spaces, so I can tell it’s deliberate, and the trueness of it is all that matters.

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You mean in its last sentence? I don’t know. I pick up influences all over!
“Nothing Gold Can Stay.”
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