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Since multiple people have suggested it, I'd like to opine that dropping "now, Dave" would be bad for the meter (the unequal lines improve the poem mightily), bad for losing "now" (essential to the point that if you are in such a state now, you'll always be in such a state), and bad for losing "Dave" (which is important for indicating that this poem is addressed to a particular person).

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