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Old 07-08-2018, 01:20 PM
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Duncan Gillies MacLaurin Duncan Gillies MacLaurin is offline
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You get my vote, Andrew, though of course we're not voting. I suggest you ditch "once" in L1 though as, for me, it makes for the only anapaest in what is otherwise strict iambic meter:

WHO was HE, who once JOINED us HERE.

I guess your intent is that it should be read:

Who WAS he, WHO once JOINED us HERE.

But that's not how I read it. If you italicised "was", then I'd read it that way.


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Old 07-08-2018, 07:46 PM
Bill Carpenter Bill Carpenter is offline
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That's great, Andrew. Full of Murphy mischief and fun (see the pig with the wooden leg, and thank God it was only blood). I first met Tim at West Chester in 2011. I was amazed at how he filled the large auditorium with the bellow of his Old English reciting Beowulf's funeral.
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