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Unread 07-17-2018, 11:57 AM
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O, bracket, O, crust, O black staining whore!
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And mine are closer to IT.
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Unread 07-17-2018, 12:17 PM
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An exclamative whore sounds like a potential ending to me. Andrew? Thoughts?

I'm excited. And I didn't cheat! The cynical fellow of three nights ago seems like a different person...

Edit: alternatively, the saga could continue...?

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I think we can end this one with a triple rhyme, and start a new one if people are interested.
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Unread 07-18-2018, 08:15 AM
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Drumroll...


They search for stars among the puddles of
the various ways to Mornington Crescent.
Across the moon a blade-like cloud, incessant
Manhattan, Margarita, Molotov.
Whose are these bones whose bones we keep
or motte and bailey? Keep or cast aside?
Bright green grass that drips insecticide.
Drowsy syrup. See bee deep sleep. Weep.
Our island hearts are battered at the shore,
a Pollyanna-ish polypore,
O, bracket, O, crust, O black staining whore!


Hope you don't mind the reveal Andrew, I'm still atoning for my initial skepticism. Thank you, this was good fun. In order the lines were: Andrew, Ann, me, Ann, Walter, Ann, Andrew, Ann, me, Walter, Ann.

Phew...

Edited to fix Ann's last line.

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Unread 07-18-2018, 08:49 AM
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Not at all. Oddly, I thought I posted the reveal.

I'd be down for another...
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Sorry, guys (I seem to be saying that a lot lately), but this is basically masturbation, except that because it's on a Poetry Site instead of in a shower, you can call it Art. Play with anything long enough and you'll eventually get an orgasm or a decent line or two. Wow!
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Unread 07-18-2018, 10:00 AM
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[Scene: a bunch of Spherians at a table playing a game, all having fun. In bursts Michael Cantor...]

Cantor: I AM NOT HAVING FUN STOP HAVING FUN THAT WAY THAT IS AN INAPPROPRIATE WAY TO HAVE FUN STOP IT
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Unread 07-18-2018, 10:19 AM
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Oh Michael,

Nobody, but nobody, has suggested this is Art, with or without a capital A. It's in 'Drills and Amusements' for goodness sake. I believe 'good fun' was my summation. Stop creating a straw man to attack – especially when he's happily having a wank. (because I know how much you like smileys too...)
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Unread 07-18-2018, 10:22 AM
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But you see Mark the Sphere is Special because in the old days people labored for years on their D&A posts. Stop degrading the quality of the board.
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