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Unread 05-30-2019, 10:42 PM
Martin Elster Martin Elster is online now
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Hi Matt and Ed,

Many thanks for stopping by! I made a couple of tweaks with your suggestions in mind. I’m glad you both enjoyed this.

Matt - those are excellent points you made. I’m trying “edging” for how the phantoms move. And, thanks to Ed, I’m going with “on roads” in place of “around” (in S4). Regarding the “and” instead of “or” (trucks or cars), I understand what you mean, and made the change to "and."

Ed - Nice to see you! I’m going to go with “on roads” for “around.” That's definitely a better description of what happens to many unlucky creatures.

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Martin
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