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Unread 02-07-2021, 09:37 PM
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A man that I met in Suzhou
had a Dragon Li kitty, Mao mao*
who told me “That’s how
they all call me now,
but my family name is Me-ow.”

There was a fry-cook in Miami
who envied a chef known as Sammy.
He said “It’s agreed
only one can exceed
Miami’s Sammy. I am he.”

While dissecting his mother-in-law
a sawyer in Ogden, Utah,
said “I am so sad.
My eyes have gone bad,
and I no longer see what I saw."

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* wee Mao

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Unread 02-07-2021, 09:50 PM
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It is against Sphere rules to post a poem less than seven days after the previous one, and you just posted one a day or two ago on the Deep End. A mod will probably lock this thread till the seven days are up on the other.
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Unread 02-08-2021, 01:41 PM
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Limericks are fun, so I'll just move this thread to Drills & Amusements.

(A 92 year-old member can be cut a bit of slack, I think )

Jayne
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Unread 02-08-2021, 01:56 PM
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Hi Wiley,

We don't, as a general rule, critique the poems on this board, though we do offer up suggestions now and then.

As you originally posted this on Metrical (presumably for critique to be given) I'll say that "Krakow" is usually pronounced more like ''Krak-oof'', so it's not a good rhyme to match your -ow sounds.
How about looking for a different town or city to have met the man, rather than this Polish one, as the cat is a Chinese breed? (And limericks don't usually have just the one rhyme sound throughout.)

It's good to see you posting (though please do bear in mind that Andrew is right about the 7-day gap between starting new threads.)

All the best,
Jayne
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Thanks Jayne. Suzou is a town a little west of the enormous city of Shanghai. I do have difficulties using my keyboard, so I am grateful for the slack you cut me in placement. I will try to find the "rules" which I did not remember from years ago when I used to hang out here. See archives for some of my best back then: Homeric Simile, and Caraval, for examples.

You have been most kind to me, and I appreciate it greatly.

Wiley

PS I now write one poem a day as therapy for the brain aspects of Parkinson's syndrome. It seems to help.
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Good for you Wiley, or as they say in Australia ‘good on ya’. You are an example to us all!. Even though I am a spring chicken and seventeen years your junior, I try to write a triolet a day for the fading brain’s sake..


*NB ‘Daily’ when pronounced with an Australian accent sounds like ‘dielee’.


There was a wily old bloke called Wiley
who created a limerick daily*.
To keep his Parkinsons at bay
he composed only one a day
and then posted them all with a smiley!

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Unread 02-10-2021, 04:24 AM
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Hey Derek, I thik your limeerick is the first poem ever written on my name or for me at all. I will keep it in one of my notebooks of poems for my grandchildren and great grandchildren. Thanks,

Wile (sometimes called Wiley Fox)

A poet of Australian clime
writes verses of curious rhyme
such as Derek, his forename,
with Herrick, the surname,
of one who told virgins to make much of time.

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Hello Wile,
Thank you. That is great to hear. I am honoured.

Derek.
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Unread 02-10-2021, 09:50 PM
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Thanks, Wile,

I am flattered by your use of Derek and Herrick. It may, of course, only be for the sake of rhyme! Bravo. An excellent limerick.

Derek.

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