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08-26-2018, 06:55 AM
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Poem in New Verse News
My poem, "Altar Boy", is on the New Verse News website today, Sunday, August 26, along with a 3-minute video. Unfortunately, the reverend was "kicked upstairs" (i.e., promoted to Monsignor) and transferred from my church to another parish, where he abused a dear friend of mine. My chopped up sonnet is the second poem on the page.
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08-26-2018, 08:48 AM
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I like the poem, Cathy, but found it harder to read with the spacing and the lack of punctuation. I had to ignore those in order to hear the music of it.
Susan
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08-26-2018, 09:42 AM
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The chopped-up nature of it struck me as apt for the speaker and the subject. Brava, Cathy!
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08-26-2018, 11:22 AM
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I like, too. While one of the words starting with f rubs me up the wrong way, at least the jolt of crudeness is purposeful; an indecent word for an indecent object of treatment. I could say the same thing for the want of punctuation and the spacing that further disorients. Yet as Aaron rightly observed, the absence of such coherence is, for this particular speaker and subject, only apt. I should think it well compassed, then. Congratulations, Cathy!
Last edited by Erik Olson; 08-26-2018 at 11:53 AM.
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08-26-2018, 03:36 PM
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(Never mind. Embarrassed by the clanging noise of my own opinions.)
I think it's a brilliant, powerful poem, Cathy.
Last edited by Mark McDonnell; 08-28-2018 at 03:20 PM.
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