Eratosphere Forums - Metrical Poetry, Free Verse, Fiction, Art, Critique, Discussions Able Muse - a review of poetry, prose and art

Forum Left Top

Notices

Reply
Thread Tools Display Modes
  #1  
Unread 07-05-2022, 10:21 AM
Martin Elster Martin Elster is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Connecticut, USA
Posts: 7,463
Default The Asses of Parnassus

A haiku of mine appears today in The Asses of Parnassus.

https://assesofparnassus.tumblr.com/...54295296/haiku
Reply With Quote
  #2  
Unread 07-05-2022, 12:37 PM
RCL's Avatar
RCL RCL is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Oct 2000
Location: Los Angeles, CA
Posts: 6,306
Default

Kudos, cleverly concocted!
__________________
Ralph
Reply With Quote
  #3  
Unread 07-05-2022, 02:27 PM
Gail White's Avatar
Gail White Gail White is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Apr 2001
Location: Breaux Bridge, LA, USA
Posts: 3,433
Default

This is delightful.
Reply With Quote
  #4  
Unread 07-05-2022, 02:34 PM
Sarah-Jane Crowson's Avatar
Sarah-Jane Crowson Sarah-Jane Crowson is offline
Moderator
 
Join Date: Oct 2018
Location: UK
Posts: 1,471
Default

Lol at the wordplay on 'ears'. Very nice (alliteration nice too).

Sarah-Jane
Reply With Quote
  #5  
Unread 07-05-2022, 03:00 PM
Allen Tice's Avatar
Allen Tice Allen Tice is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Nov 2006
Location: Brooklyn, NY USA
Posts: 6,000
Default

I’m a softy for brilliant puns, and this is one, make no mistake: I love it.

I think it would be just as good in a Japanese way if there were no pun. “Indifferent ___”: grass, deer, flies, ants, etc, even groundhogs except for the syllable count.

Nice.
Reply With Quote
  #6  
Unread 07-05-2022, 04:21 PM
F.F. Teague F.F. Teague is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Jul 2017
Location: Gloucestershire, UK
Posts: 1,790
Default

Congratulations, Martin; very haikool

Best wishes,
Fliss
Reply With Quote
  #7  
Unread 07-05-2022, 04:31 PM
Martin Elster Martin Elster is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Connecticut, USA
Posts: 7,463
Default

Thanks, Ralph, Gail, Sarah-Jane, and Allen.

Allen, woodchucks, hedgehogs, or beetles would work, too, though I’d miss the pun, which I’m happy you like.

Sarah-Jane, thanks for mentioning the alliteration!

Quote:
Originally Posted by RCL View Post
Kudos, cleverly concocted!
Good one, Ralph!
Reply With Quote
  #8  
Unread 07-05-2022, 04:50 PM
John Riley John Riley is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: North Carolina
Posts: 5,430
Default

Congratulations, Martin. I’ve been working on haiku and tanka lately. They’re very challenging. Like the alliteration?
Reply With Quote
  #9  
Unread 07-05-2022, 08:54 PM
Martin Elster Martin Elster is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Nov 2007
Location: Connecticut, USA
Posts: 7,463
Default

Thanks, Fliss! (We cross-posted.)

Thanks, John! You are inspiring me to write some tanka now.
Reply With Quote
  #10  
Unread 07-06-2022, 03:25 AM
F.F. Teague F.F. Teague is offline
Member
 
Join Date: Jul 2017
Location: Gloucestershire, UK
Posts: 1,790
Default

Yes, do write some tanka;
I'm sure we'd all thank ya!

Reply With Quote
Reply

Bookmarks

Thread Tools
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

BB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



Forum Right Top
Forum Left Bottom Forum Right Bottom
 
Right Left
Member Login
Forgot password?
Forum LeftForum Right


Forum Statistics:
Forum Members: 8,269
Total Threads: 21,427
Total Posts: 270,832
There are 155 users
currently browsing forums.
Forum LeftForum Right


Forum Sponsor:
Donate & Support Able Muse / Eratosphere
Forum LeftForum Right
Right Right
Right Bottom Left Right Bottom Right

Hosted by ApplauZ Online