Good morning Ashley,
And thank you for your thoughts! Glad you enjoyed the piece in general, and I've adopted your never
suggestion. To my ear, the word poetry
scans better than poems
, and your Neruda idea raises some interesting points. First, I think it's very cute. Second, Cindy categorically doesn't like ANY poetry, that's kind of the point, and I lose that with the alternative ending. Third, the remark, while brilliant, was to my mind best said in the VP debate of 1988 by Lloyd Bentsen to Dan Quayle: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Senato...o_Jack_Kennedy
Fourth, I'm sorry but I feel Neruda is massively overrated, and don't really want to further that. His fame kind of reminds me of that of Charles Bukowski. People read him and go "Oh yeah, dude, poetry! Far out!" Or Rupi Kaur, for that matter. I'm not saying he writes all crap, I'm saying that as in the case of the Mona Lisa, the Louvre has several other paintings folks might enjoy.
Thanks for making me think,