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Unread 10-08-2001, 08:44 PM
ChrisW ChrisW is offline
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Very funny, Jan! The "Modern Nun" bit certainly got the biggest laugh from me.

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Unread 10-09-2001, 11:27 AM
nyctom nyctom is offline
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Gay personal ads are so funny aren't they? I like this, but I think you can do much more with it. My favorite is the opening, which is just spot on. But the drive a bus line is rhyme driven and I think you can do more with people who tell you every stat they have except their IQ. I think if you er uhm probe deeper, this could be more than an exercise. The uh raw material is certainly there. This is a giggle--but I think it can be a belly laugh. Why should nuns have all the fun (with apologies to Jan)?

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Unread 10-11-2001, 12:35 PM
conny conny is offline
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Shooting The clown

It`s up to you! Choose your game!
Just grab the cash, come on down!
Whatever you want, it`s the same

as blackjack; Look! Men with no name
in a western out-law town;
It`s up to you! Choose your game!

QUICK DRAW! See the muzzle flame
and shoot the nose of our creepy clown!
Whatever you want!...Its the same

as Super Mario; But very, very lame.

Win a mint, or wear a goofy crown!
It`s up to you! Choose your game!

OK I will; We can share the blame;
Mine`s called `lick my balls and drown'

Whatever you want! It`s the same

as always winning!... I still take aim;
And with all intent, then frown.

It`s up to you! Choose your game!
Whatever you want, It`s the same.

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Unread 10-11-2001, 05:49 PM
Tony Tony is offline
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Brilliant, as usual. My favorite lines:

you've taken Brogue and Mayan Hieroglyph,
or maybe seven years of Modern Nun,

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Unread 10-11-2001, 10:01 PM
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John Beaton John Beaton is offline
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Elastic Tights

Believe me (there's no way to lie)
elastic tights will hide your weight.
Try them on – a model buy.

Your low fat diet's just blue sky;
your fat's so low you cannot mate.
Believe me, there's no way to lie.

Elastic tights will make men sigh
at how your folds consolidate.
Try them on and waddle by -

they won’t get seasickness or cry.
(They do so while you hesitate
believe me.) There's no way to lie,

to kid yourself, by saying, "I
won't swell if I procrastinate!"
Try; then own a middle gi-

ganticer than K2’s. My,
our free elastic inch-tape’s great;
believe me, there’s no sweeter lie -
try the “Mona” model. Bye.
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