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Unread 04-29-2001, 08:01 AM
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The following haiku, which "deconstruct" Microsoft Windows, have been whipping around the Web for a while.

Your mission: write a haiku based on today's technology: computers, the WWW, cell phones, remote controls, DVD, HDTV, robotics, IMAX, hydroponics, anything techie at all.

Stay true to the craft of Haiku:

-- A poem of three lines
-- Line one: 5 syllables
-- Line two: 7 syllables
-- Line three: 5 syllables

Here are the samples:

First snow, then silence.
This thousand dollar screen dies
so beautifully.

Windows NT crashed.
I am the blue screen of death.
No one hears your screams.

With searching comes loss
and the presence of absence:
"My Novel" not found.

The Tao that is seen
is not the true Tao until
you bring fresh toner.


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Unread 04-30-2001, 08:49 AM
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WINDOWS, too soon the
Format of the world--as if
Square wheels conquered first.
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My venerable
abacus! Another damn
crash of fenestra!

[This message has been edited by Nigel Holt (edited May 04, 2001).]
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Unread 05-05-2001, 06:54 PM
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<HTML>
Soft pixel flutter
Gracefully gliding mouse track
Fast moving modem
</HTML>
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Unread 05-06-2001, 12:51 PM
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Golden disk of song,
sounds from the past - my breath caught:
a scratch made you skip.

Forward and rewind
tape slides, pulls, one day will break;
DVD instead.

Back, Forward
Stop, Refresh, Home or Search;
Favorites, then Print.




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Just one person's opinion.
Davida Chazan
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Unread 05-08-2001, 02:06 PM
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Davida beat me to the punch, sort of. I think the keyboard offers an even more rigorous and grimmer version of refridgerator poetry.

End shift. Enter home.
Insert Tab. Delete control.
Escape help. End. End.


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Originally posted by Kate Benedict:
The following haiku, which "deconstruct" Microsoft Windows, have been whipping around the Web for a while.

Your mission: write a haiku based on today's technology: computers, the WWW, cell phones, remote controls, DVD, HDTV, robotics, IMAX, hydroponics, anything techie at all.

Stay true to the craft of Haiku:

-- A poem of three lines
-- Line one: 5 syllables
-- Line two: 7 syllables
-- Line three: 5 syllables

Here are the samples:

First snow, then silence.
This thousand dollar screen dies
so beautifully.

Windows NT crashed.
I am the blue screen of death.
No one hears your screams.

With searching comes loss
and the presence of absence:
"My Novel" not found.

The Tao that is seen
is not the true Tao until
you bring fresh toner.


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Unread 05-08-2001, 06:44 PM
Brett Thibault Brett Thibault is offline
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Screen blinks static snow
Error message avalanche
Plastic keyboard flies
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Unread 05-11-2001, 12:52 PM
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DSL, snarky
Flake--i want what's next when they
Get it perfected.
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Unread 05-12-2001, 07:35 AM
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Okay, I have poems about computers, I spent almost 7 years in the Navy working on all sorts --- from car sized mainframes to mini-mini --- nothing was finer than to pass a 12 hour midwatch writing a few poems about those monsters! So, this was fun.

Mag tape drive vacuum
slurps strip over shiny spindles
laser tongue tastes bytes


My cordless mouse blinks
eyes peer at controller: pines
for umbilical


Like Fall's golden fruit
past saved for retrieval
O! Disk file error

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~~Mary
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Unread 05-31-2001, 01:52 PM
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I have read many of the haikus posted here. Although, not all of them are in the traditional form, they are good and very creative...I have enjoyed reading them..
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