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Unread 07-02-2018, 05:30 PM
Mark McDonnell Mark McDonnell is offline
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Default Thank you Matthew Zapruder

So, over on GT the poet Matthew Zapruder's ideas about 'conceptual rhyme' are being discussed with some earnestness. Nobody seemed to actually know his poetry, though, so I looked some up and posted a couple. He has about half a dozen on Poetry Foundation. It seemed a certain 'type' of poetry to me. Entertaining, but so free-associative as to seem easy to do. I had a go. I went full stream of consciousness. My point is, what started in a spirit of mockery (never one of the best spirits) began to feel wonderful! Thanks Matthew!

Poem for Matthew

It's something when even saints
are bored. When the two o'clock last helmers
bus their way out, spend the evening
discussing Russian literature
with ghosts on the internet in exchange
for selfies of dead scientists.
I drink my coffee, think of my neighbour Annie
who didn't mind my hair gel on her couch.
For shame she said, her own hair flying
and spreading across the sky like butter,
I only wear this dress to spill
my gin on, don't think I'm as juniper
ready as that my dear, my chuck.
Oh wear a high collar a turtleneck
and cross your legs in the corner
like twine, right over left and
foot behind the ankle. Stare
at the book, yes, but earwig for your name
it will come it will come it will.
Here they all keep candlewax in purses,
now soft now brittle but glowing always
with dream translucency that melts
and makes us moths.
England doesn't deserve you
it coughs into its newspaper, belches,
hands the last scrap of Blake's illuminations
to any passing online poker sting.
See how your mother still brings in washing,
pins in her mouth, singing the wrong words
to a song she should have been dancing to.
See the chalked stones you remember,
the blue bike you gave to the boy with flesh tape
on his glasses, his soft cry of refusal.
The watering can. See the whole sky
in quick reverse, the child you were
before the penny dropped.

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Unread 07-02-2018, 05:54 PM
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Mark, your Zapruder seems to have also tapped into your inner Billy Collins!

Your mention of the Coffee Muse drew only this from me:

A Coffee Epiphany

Many mornings brewing coffee
while suffering through the TV gab,
I think about my growing flab
like a bear rug that's hugging me.
Reflected in the toaster, I see
my gut has added globs to grab
and I recall my huge bar tab.
This is not what I want to be!
I vow to get my old form back,
to exercise and consume less
cheese, fat burgers, quarts of beer,
eliminate the sausage snack—
then caffeine jolts my vow’s duress
awakens truth: perhaps next year.
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Unread 07-02-2018, 06:41 PM
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From Russia With Love

I think today I'll write about
Potemkin Villages
while sipping my tea -
hell, I'm Russian,
or at least my father was born there,
and I even wear a big gold ring,
a double eagle coin
with the Tsar of All the Russias
trapped face down
kissing my finger,
so the description of these villages -
facades
propped up house-fronts
nothing behind them
erected quickly
fits right in -
and I can even use it
to write my daily
Potemkin Poem
because it gives me something,
to talk about
some starting point
and piece of reality -
good images,
the ring,
all those Potemkin housefronts,
maybe sheathed in ice
in a hard Russian winter,
while I scribble
scrabble dribble
drabble
words and pictures down a page
as quickly as I can type
and make sure to
provide
many
line breaks
so it looks like a poem
and it's amazing
how many people
regard it as a poem,
even me,
even though all I did was
quickly write
whatever came into my head
scrible scrabble, dribble, drabble,
for fifteen minutes,
and here's my latest
Potemkin Poem.


Confession: I did write this in about fifteen minutes to mock something or other - maybe Zapruder (who remembers?) - but it was many years ago. I added the tea line (I assume that's a suitable substitute for coffee) just now.

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Unread 07-02-2018, 07:11 PM
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That's funny, Michael. I realised after about the third line of mine that I don't do parody. I'm clearly not cynical enough. Instead I just really enjoyed myself...
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Unread 07-02-2018, 07:26 PM
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We were talking about Michael's latest
poem and how he needed to loosen up
a little with his line-breaks and perhaps
even consider subverting the whole idea
of what a poem was, when Mark said
he'd consumed more than enough coffee
poetry and called over to order his third latte
from the waitress who looked a little like
the woman from that soap opera
from the seventies that neither of us
could quite remember -- except she had
lank hair, and slightly dead eyes,
like a fish. You wouldn't find hair like that
in a soap opera, Mark said, and fish
surely don't belong in a poem
about coffee. He started back in
on his theory about how every good poem
should end on a conceptual rhyme,
and I started to tell him how my father
had once visited the local docks on a school trip,
and there was a diver there, decked out
in baggy 1950s diving suit and one of those
big metal helmets, who'd played a trick
on all the other kids who watched him
submerge into water that was black
as an Americano, bubbles floating up
like the froth on fresh-poured cappuccino,
and then, after the the longest time,
just as their interest had begun to waver,
he'd surfaced holding up a fish, which,
and this was the joke, was actually a kipper.
But by then Mark had fallen asleep.


[I think I'm probably channelling ultratalk more than Zapruder, but I had fun anyways]

[for non-Brits. A 'kipper' is a smoked fish (typically herring). 'to kip' is to 'to sleep']

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Unread 07-02-2018, 08:11 PM
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POEM WRITTEN IN 90 SECONDS
(you'll ask what took me)

Zapruder happened to film
JFK's head being blown off
onto Jackie's lap, but somehow
didn't catch the second
gunman, but me? I wonder
who laid the seed on that knoll
to make it grassy in the first place,
and what does it matter?
It's true: the happenstance
of Zapruder's celluloid
made his name notorious,
but the money came in handy,
so who am I to argue? I wasn't
born when all this happened,
and for all I know it didn't,
the way history books lie these days,
and truth is in the mind of the poet,
once again exposed on the film of Zapruder,
the lone gunman of metaphor.
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Unread 07-03-2018, 12:00 AM
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Matt, Roger - brilliant, brilliant.

Matt - 'Ultratalk' eh? You're a veritable glossary. I just read an article about it (didn't have to use quotation mark or anything!) Yes, that's exactly it.

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