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Old 09-24-2018, 05:50 AM
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Now that I'm settled in, a proper reply to you both. Thank you again for your sensitive readings.

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Daniel, based on how you're scanning the opening lines, you seem to be focusing on absolute stress, whereas I wrote this mostly paying attention to relative stress. So I scan the opening stanza as follows:
it's MORNing NOW; EARTH is aWAKE,
at LEAST this SLIVer THAT the SUN,
new-MADE, enLIGHTens. you WATCH its FIRE
BANish the DREAMworld FOR more STABle
FANtaSIES: for INstance, this MOUNTain
it's CROWNing: SOLid, long-STANDing, PUBlic.
While not perfectly regular IT, IT as the dominant pattern emerges fairly clearly: there are trochaic substitutions in L1 and L4, and anapests in L3, L5, and L6, but at least three iambs per line.

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Matt, it's been really enlightening to watch you work through the nature of the speakers in this piece. For my part (I don't claim special privileges as author here), I see the piece as supporting both the Heraclitus-as-N (or Heraclitean-as-N) reading and the self-address reading.

I hear your worries about the turn, but I'm not sure I share them. The speaker in S5 tries to make a point that even if all is transient, at least some things have duration, like the mountain. Each day, we awake, and it's there. But this leads the speaker directly into the thought that, by being there, the mountain invites thoughts of its own destruction ("invites" because, as you noted earlier, it is easy for many to look at the mountain and not think of it, too, as subject to generation and destruction). Thus the speaker thought he had something he could take solace inóbut no.

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Thanks all for your help with this. I'm fairly happy with how this turned out.
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