[John Riley]

Me again. A short piece of prose at CafeLit. 700 words. I like this one. Hope you read it if you have a moment.

https://cafelitcreativecafe.blogspot.../05/jimmy.html

[Mark McDonnell]

John, wow, that's good. The kids just swap, yes? Magical. And she eats the inscrutable pear! This line stopped me in my tracks:

'Jimmy began to think more deeply about the bus. It'd be like two worlds. The one outside speeding by, the one inside holding still.'

[John Riley]

Thanks, Mark. This is one I just wrote down. My job was to get my mind out of the way. I think that's why I am so affectionate toward it. I'm happy you feel that as well.

I didn't think of the symbolism of pears or pomegranates. They seemed to be plausible fruits and there you go.

Best

[Cally Conan-Davies]

John, I'm so glad I looked into this thread, because it is magical. I don't think I could ever get tired of reading this story. It opens, givingly, in so many ways, and at the same time it is as grounded as seed.

Wonder-ful, my friend! Wonder-full.

Cally

[John Isbell]

Hi John,

Yup, very nice. Weird and effective.

Cheers,
John