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01-06-2019, 12:00 PM
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Five Tankas in Better Than Starbucks
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01-06-2019, 01:54 PM
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Cheerful little ditties, huh?
My favorite is II--I suspect that I know several people with similar views.
Although I quite like III, too, which reminds me of the gardening hat that Titian originally painted on Jesus's head in the National Gallery's Noli Me Tangere, and then painted over.
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01-06-2019, 09:08 PM
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Thank you, Julie
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01-06-2019, 10:20 PM
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I like 'em. II is my favorite as well, it reminds me both of Laplace and of Piranesi.
I think I enjoy your art in short bursts, John. It just has time to go bang and is over. It is unexpected enough.
Cheers,
John
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01-07-2019, 12:47 AM
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Congrats, John. I remember at least number II, which I recall from a group of short pieces you posted. I too like that best, but IV is close, esp. "treasure-green heads, . . . vibrations freed from the frame."
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01-07-2019, 05:04 AM
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Wonderful, John. I enjoyed them all. I’m putting in a solitary vote for first. Maybe it fits my mood in a way. Thanks for posting these.
Siham
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01-07-2019, 06:51 AM
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Great stuff John. I think I remember one or two of these from a selection that you posted here while back (II & III? maybe). I like them all, and what you've done with form, though if we're voting, I'm with Siham, the first is my favourite.
-Matt
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01-08-2019, 11:32 AM
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Thanks, guys. I'm pleased you like them. I wrote 170 of them in a short period of time. I realize that thematically they don't all, or even most, fit the tanka form. I do like writing the 5-7-5-7-7 syllable count. They feel a little bit the way a sonnet feels while writing.
John
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