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Old 06-02-2018, 09:34 AM
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Hi Jeanne,
Welcome to the 'sphere. I agree with Michael--Andrew's rearrangement is much more interesting than the original, though I'm not sure about the linebreaks--insomina is unrelenting. As the poem stands, my reaction is much the same as Jim's and Mary's -- there is too little here to surprise me.

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