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Unread 02-11-2020, 01:47 PM
Aaron Poochigian Aaron Poochigian is offline
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The Age of Anger

I’ll say a few words now, by way of dirge,
by way of rage, against the current strong
tyranny in America. The urge
to bellow has been loud in me so long,
and I can’t keep it prisoned any longer:
Seattle to Miami, LA to Bangor,
our nation founders as the wrong gets wronger.
Americans, this is the Age of Anger.

Should we, surrounded, just kick back and wait
as if the crimson flood will move out like
a high tide dying? Should we suffer hate?
No, we must man the pump and build the dyke
by heaving all the sandbags we can heft.
We must not stop at outrage, at mere censure:
forbearance means there will be nothing left.
Act, friends, though this may be our last adventure,

or else our sacred freedom to assemble
like here, like now, and speak our minds and rhymes
will turn illegal. Let us only tremble
with fervor as we warn these fervid times:
“Just like the dinosaurs, our human rights
will go extinct.” Let’s go all-out and all-in
and, spoiling for this country’s fight of fights,
arise, arise or be forever fallen.

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Hi Aaron,

For a kind of ‘angry anthem’ I find the N to be strangely coy and non-specific about the reasons for their anger. So any number of readings are possible about who exactly feels themselves to be “the ousted” and what the “crimson flood” might be. I can equally read it as an anti-Trump rallying cry, or as right wing anti-immigrant, anti-‘leftist thought police’ paranoia. Perhaps the ambiguity is deliberate and you’re making a point that everyone seems so angry right now that it just becomes background noise. The title maybe hints at this. If it is deliberate, though, I’m not sure it’s working for me. And if it isn’t then the poem seems strangely all bluster without the conviction of specifics. I’m not sure your tic of using “like” works at S3L2.

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Yeah, umn, Mark, you, umn, suck, and I don't really care about your opinion.
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Aaron wrote: "Yeah, umn, Mark, you, umn, suck, and I don't really care about your opinion."


Which is why so few of us now respond to your posts, Aaron.
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Philip Freneau did this sort of thing better.
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Quote:
Philip Freneau did this sort of thing better.
(The poetry, or the childish petulance?)

Bye, Aaron. Good luck with whatever's troubling you.

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I was tempted to simply delete this thread (as you don't care about others' opinions, Aaron, there's not much point in it being here) but I've decided to close it instead.

There is absolutely no need for your rudeness to Mark, who has taken the trouble to give you an honest critique; this is what the Deep End was created for.

Whatever your particular demons are, Aaron, it's not fair to take out your frustration, anger...whatever... on kind, well-meaning members. Eratosphere is not a vanity site where only gushing praise is acceptable.

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