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Old 05-19-2018, 05:39 AM
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Ah yes, Annie. And here is the tune, for lazies like me.
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Old 05-20-2018, 12:37 PM
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Hi John,

Here's a charming song to sing to a baby boy <(:-)

I like Ann's suggestion. You could use 'joy' there rather than 'coy' if you end with 'What a boy! What a boy!' The song has 'Ship ahoy! Ship ahoy!', so that keeps with the pattern. Then you could try 'With a smile so full of joy', or something.

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Old 05-25-2018, 10:18 AM
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To echo what Aaron Poochigian had said, it is indeed nice to see you posting on these boards again. I confess, I neither know how I would begin to critique an air such as this. Of course, it hardly helps that it reads flawlessly from the first; from tone to timber to rhythm, the music is nothing short of impeccable. I durst not advise you meddle with a note, therefore, cannot imagine an improvement to be made. So I simply register my approbation and say that I enjoyed reading it.
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nothing out-sings deserves the bays.

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