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Unread 11-11-2020, 09:06 PM
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Default The Breath of Fall
Workshopped here:

https://tinyseedjournal.com/2020/11/...reath-of-fall/
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Ralph, that's gorgeous.

I love the repetition of "leaves" as well.
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Very nice, Ralph.

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Well done, Ralph!
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Beautifully written, Ralph.

As you know, over here we say ''Autumn'', not "Fall", but the poem would read just as well if one word was substituted for the other. Having said that, it's gorgeous (Aaron's word, ...spot on) just as it is.

I didn't happen to see the thread where it was workshopped; my bad. But congratulations on its publication.

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Thanks and kisses to all! With help, I got lucky with this one. A nice surprise.
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