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Old 05-24-2018, 09:28 AM
Susan McLean Susan McLean is offline
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Aaron, to my mind, your version departs more from the original than mine does. I am still fiddling with mine to make the syntax more natural, but I don't think it is the sound of the violin that is helping the people to avoid suicide. I assume that releasing the sadness by playing the violin is the alternative to committing suicide.

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Old 05-24-2018, 12:25 PM
Aaron Poochigian Aaron Poochigian is offline
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Keep trying to fix those lines, though, the "are found/drowned" lines, because what you have isn't working.
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