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Old 11-14-2017, 04:27 PM
Aaron Poochigian Aaron Poochigian is offline
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Default Bacchae--Earthquake and Fire

(The voice of Dionysus is head from offstage.)

Dionysus:
Hear me, Bacchae! Bacchae, heed my voice!

Half Chorus 1:
Who is it? Who is there? From where
are you, O Rapture, calling out to us?

Dionysus:
Again, again I roar,
I, the son of Semele and Zeus.

Half Chorus 2:
O master, master, join our holy band.
Come join us, Roaring God!

Dionysus:
Now, Earthquake Goddess, shake the level ground!

Half Chorus 1:
Ah! Ah! The halls of Pentheus will soon
collapse in ruin. The god is in the house.
Exalt his power.

Half Chorus 2:
We exalt his power.
Don’t you see the stone
atop the columns breaking down?
That's Dionysus there inside
roaring a victory ode.

Dionysus:
Come, fire of the lightning-bolt, consume
the house of Pentheus, burn it down!

Half Chorus 1:
There around Semele’s all-hallowed tomb,
Ah, don’t you see it, can’t you see the flame
that Zeus’ bolt of lightning left behind?
Throw your trembling bodies to the ground,
Maenads, to the ground, for Zeus’ son,
our Lord, is near at hand
turning everything upside down.

. . . . .

"turning" for "throwing"

Translation by Gregory Nagy and Alexander Sens

Dionysus
Io! Hear my voice, hear it, Io Bacchae, Io Bacchae.



Chorus
Who is here, who? From what quarter did the voice of the Joyful one summon me?


Dionysus
580 Io! Io! I say again; it is I, the child of Zeus and Semele.


Chorus
Io! Io! My master, my master! Come then to our band, Bromius.


Dionysus
585 Shake this place, sovereign Spirit of Earthquake!


Chorus

- Oh! Oh! Soon the palace of Pentheus will be shaken in ruin!
- Bacchus is in the halls! Revere him!
- 590 We revere him!
- Did you see these stone lintels on the pillars falling apart? Bromius shouts in victory inside the palace!


Dionysus
Light the fiery lamp of lightning! 595 Burn, burn Pentheus’ household!



Chorus
Oh! Oh! Do you not see the fire, do you not perceive, about the sacred [hieron] tomb of Semele, the flame that Zeus’ thunderbolt left? 600 Throw to the ground your trembling bodies, Maenads, cast them down, for our lord, Zeus’ offspring, is approaching the palace, turning everything upside down.
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Greek Text
Διόνυσος

ἰώ,
κλύετ᾽ ἐμᾶς κλύετ᾽ αὐδᾶς,
ἰὼ βάκχαι, ἰὼ βάκχαι.
________________________________________
Χορός

τίς ὅδε, τίς ὅδε πόθεν ὁ κέλαδος
ἀνά μ᾽ ἐκάλεσεν Εὐίου;
________________________________________
Διόνυσος

580ἰὼ ἰώ, πάλιν αὐδῶ,
ὁ Σεμέλας, ὁ Διὸς παῖς.
________________________________________
Χορός

ἰὼ ἰὼ δέσποτα δέσποτα,
μόλε νυν ἡμέτερον ἐς
θίασον, ὦ Βρόμιε Βρόμιε.
________________________________________
Διόνυσος

585σεῖε πέδον χθονὸς Ἔννοσι πότνια.
________________________________________
Χορός

ἆ ἆ,
τάχα τὰ Πενθέως μέλαθρα διατι-
νάξεται πεσήμασιν.
— ὁ Διόνυσος ἀνὰ μέλαθρα:
590σέβετέ νιν. — σέβομεν ὤ.
— εἴδετε λάινα κίοσιν ἔμβολα
διάδρομα τάδε; Βρόμιος ὅδ᾽ ἀλα-
λάζεται στέγας ἔσω.
________________________________________
Διόνυσος

ἅπτε κεραύνιον αἴθοπα λαμπάδα:
595σύμφλεγε σύμφλεγε δώματα Πενθέος.
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Χορός

ἆ ἆ,
πῦρ οὐ λεύσσεις, οὐδ᾽ αὐγάζῃ,
Σεμέλας ἱερὸν ἀμφὶ τάφον, ἅν
ποτε κεραυνόβολος ἔλιπε φλόγα
Δίου βροντᾶς;
600δίκετε πεδόσε τρομερὰ σώματα
δίκετε, Μαινάδες: ὁ γὰρ ἄναξ
ἄνω κάτω τιθεὶς ἔπεισι
μέλαθρα τάδε Διὸς γόνος.

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Old 11-15-2017, 03:54 AM
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A few small suggestions for improvement:

(That's Dionysus there inside)
It's Dionysus whoís inside

(Ah, donít you see it, canít you see the flame)
ah, canít you see it, canít you find the flame

(our Lord, is near at hand
throwing everything upside down.)
our Lord, is close at hand
turning everything upside down.

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Old 11-15-2017, 06:24 AM
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Hi Aaron,

I quite like Duncan's suggestions. Also, I have none of my own on first reading. This all looks clean and fresh.

Cheers,
John
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Old 11-15-2017, 03:12 PM
Aaron Poochigian Aaron Poochigian is offline
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Hello, Duncan and John,

I accept, gratefully, the last suggestion "turning" for "throwing"--I chose "throwing" to avoid "turning," which is the obvious and also clearly the best choice.

I prefer (That's Dionysus there inside) because it only has one contraction and, I think, would play better on stage.

I also prefer the repetition of "see" in the following line: (Ah, donít you see it, canít you see the flame)

Duncan, thank you for feeding me the specific suggestions I find most useful.

Thanks, thanks,

Aaron
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