[robert mezey]

Roger, maybe a little of both. The last line or two
of the fourth stanza and all of the fifth stanza are
new, or at least composed since you last saw the poem.
As for your internal revisions, well, I can't even
guess. But I'm glad you've come to like it. Its being
in the New Yorker probably makes it look better than it
is.

[Robt_Ward]

Actually, Bob, the added 5th stanza makes a world of difference. I'd say that's another notch for the workshop, probably. We must've driven you to it

Good job!

(robt)

[Rick Mullin]

Thanks Clive. That New Yorker poem is tremendous! I didn't put myself through being here until something like 2007, so I don't remember Bob Mezey. Nice to see Janet in the thread~,:^) And a taste of early 2000s Sphere--a time, it seemed, when New Formalism was dropping off like the first stage of a Saturn V rocket, having served its purpose, and the good quality stuff was surging forward. I wish Ray Pospisil were more involved in here in those days.