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Old 10-08-2018, 11:35 PM
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With you all the way on Trakl.
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Outstanding, Jan. I am always interested in your WWI poems and this is tops. The unusual meter is a huge success. You get a deliberate solemnity as well as sheer novelty from it a potent combination. I assumed Brunhild was on the German side, but your comments made me question that. Either way, there is a strong "we foxes are in this together" undertone.

Take a look at Ernst Junger's Copse 125 for the alternate view. His national destiny militarism will make your hair stand on end. It wasn't a war about nothing, though we will never get over the waste of good foxes -- including Aussie foxes, of course. (Not identifying THE theme or meaning of the nightmare, just picking out a thread.). No doubt you know Storm of Steel, the happy warrior version of trench warfare -- quite sanitized.
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Old 11-07-2018, 02:12 PM
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Thank you Bill, your comments and understanding are greatly appreciated.

I have made some more changes with an envoi of sorts.

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