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Unread 08-04-2018, 10:52 PM
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This poem by John Quincy Adams, often said to have been the best Presidential poet, suffers from a hyperbolic last stanza. In the spirit of Eratosphere, I have fixed it.

To Miss Anna McKnight

Fair Anna, how shall I describe
My bosom’s deep reflection,
Call’d in thy Album to inscribe
The tribute of Affection?
To say I love thee were too bold –
Love, is a youthful Passion
And three score Winters are too cold
For Spring and Summer’s Fashion

I cannot offer thee my heart –
That, long has been another’s –
For me, too warm the Lover’s past:
Not warm enough the brother’s –
Thy Father, Anna, Shall I be?
That Sentiment is cheering –
But inward looking, soon I see
An impulse more endearing.

The bloom of Friendship, Sweetly blows
Nor Spinning heads, nor toiling:
But calm, the blood of Friendship flows;
And mine for thee is boiling.
Any pulses, mix’d emotions blend,
Unchang’d by Wind or Weather –
Of Lover – Brother – Father – Friend
So take them all together.

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The bloom of Friendship, Sweetly blows
Nor Spinning heads, nor storming:
But calm, the blood of Friendship flows;
And mine for thee is warming.
Any pulses, mix’d emotions blend,
Unchang’d by Wind or Climate –
Of Lover – Brother – Father – Friend --
They all describe where I'm at.
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Unread 08-07-2018, 09:23 PM
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Senorita S. Daniels (aka something else, I forget) might be pleased. Rather, I think she’d hate it. But what’s a President to do? Tweetheart even now? Not for one silicone minute! For a millisecond I thought it shed light on your current avatar, then felt ashamed. Actually, your version is as bad as the original. I’d no idea he was so fiery a fellow. Was this ever released in any of their lifetimes?

PS, looking at Bill Carpenter’s post just below, I agree with him.

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I was hoping to see "blent" rhymed with "Gent."
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