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Default A Young Person's Guide to the Orchestra

I have a poem in the latest Tinderbox. Thanks, all.
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Walter: great poem, great placement. Congrats.
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I don't know the place, but it's a gorgeous site. I remember this poem, though it might have changed. I loved it then and now.

Congrats Walter!
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the poem being both darker and lighter than I remembered, I'm green with envy
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Hi Walter,

This is nicely weird, just as weird as it should be, and so good that my urge to quote a line or two abdicated in the end, there are just too many lines to choose from. I did like the lavender though. Not what I'd write, overall, but that is again quite right. Thanks for the fun read, Walter, and congratulations.

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I recall this as the archetypal found poem; each component found, tried out on a blank page and put back in the box, changed by having been used. Changed utterly, as it were - and we know what is born from such a circumstance.

The presentation here does it proud.
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Thanks, all. This was the most mentally exhausting thing I've ever written; I could only do a few lines each day before I was tired. I'm happy with it and happy it was published and Annie as always you know exactly what to say and how to say it. Mark, the version I workshopped here didn't have all the lines yet, though I did change a few.

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Yes, I thought it had grown. Annie does have that enviable ability. You should be happy with it, Walter. It has so much strange and delicate wit and, as Annie suggests, a terrible beauty.
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Congrats, Walter. It's excellent.

(also, great bio)
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