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Old 01-03-2018, 05:46 PM
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Default Remembering the big fellow

There was this bar, a dingy culture breeding low life
most of that crowd would kick a dog if it was down
apart from which they werenít such a bad bunch of gutter dwellers
still, it pays to keep your back covered.

I was sipping lights and waiting for the pavarotti special to come on tv
staying sober because soon iíd be yelling at some of those slugs stuck to the back wall
to shut their stupid faces
and thatís when they tend to forget what a likeable bloke i really am.

This guy comes through the door, a sailor, big afro-american dude
he looks like the original ensign pulverizer
he also looks lost and if someone donít find him real soon, he just might fight his way home.

I stood up, looked straight at him and pointed at my chair
by the time heíd worked his way through the mob
i had 10ozís of frosty amber waiting for him
he downed it and ordered a bottle of tully

Man i canít hold my liquor, so it wasnít long before he gave me the chair back
then the dude starts telling nigger-honky jokes
and if i donít stop laughing soon iím gunna die
heís like bringing the whole joint undone.

To tell the truth, i donít remember much about that night except how well pavarotti sang
with us working the back up vocals
i do recall that at some point the dude poured me into a taxi and paid the driver.

They say he drank till he dropped
management dragged him into a side room
no one stuck him and no one did the rifle

i never really got to know the big fellow
but iím sure going to miss him.
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Jan Iwaszkiewicz Jan Iwaszkiewicz is offline
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This should be in non met poetry Ken. Ask a moderator and they will move it.

I liked this very much.

Regards

Jan
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Jan, thanks a bunch, I will do as you suggest once I'm eligible.

Ken
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