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Unread 02-20-2014, 03:55 PM
Miya Ko Miya Ko is offline
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You're right, Curt. I guess I'm a literary masochist. I want challenge.



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From the Erasure "Happiness and Marriage" paragraph. I cycled through the paragraph a couple of times. I left the lineation as it appeared in the original passage (except for moving punctuation marks between lines where appropriate). I guess it needs a title.

God Is Fed Up With Your Atheism

God has brains.
Just you
waiting; God
shall
show
you

reasons one and another and opposite,
until the "logic"
shall
show
you...

All this judgment is simply
against
the point.
Just let God
think, and don't
kick
God.

Just be still and
don't kick.
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Wonderful Rachael, I can throw my Richard Dawkins in the bin at last and become a Quaker again. Best erasure poem on this thread. On any thread.

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Wonderful Rachael, I can throw my Richard Dawkins in the bin at last and become a Quaker again. Best erasure poem on this thread. On any thread.

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I second that!
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Unread 02-21-2014, 02:50 PM
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Just dipping my toes in the water, trying out a form new to me... on material to hand (a post)... without personal intent!

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I think poems can be conversations

poets leave what has been visible
easily discerned as a poem
a familiar work
another conversation
between the past and the present.

is it the only good goal?

when you write English, you are using vice.
It is terribly "easy" -
write English words,
own the new text -

a poem? well...
is the process used normal?
- one's own?

this exercise may be a process:
our normal use,
our normal thinking...
patterns could back one's own prose

perhaps the process isn't work.

others comment about "respect"...
right...

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Unread 02-21-2014, 05:11 PM
Curtis Gale Weeks Curtis Gale Weeks is offline
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Rachel: I really like that. "Cycling" through a prose section obviously has good potential.

Graham: Ha! If anything, your example shows up rather well how I often speak in airy abstractions—airiness. I've tried, a few half-hearted times, to erase some of my old blog entries, and I end up with similar airiness....The fortunate thing: Erasing my own prose, I don't feel as committed to not adding new bits or changing a verb tense, etc., i.e. do not feel committed to sticking to the stricter "erasure" process.
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