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Old 07-06-2018, 11:32 AM
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The sonnenizio is a ridiculously complicated form invented by Kim Addonizio. The first line is taken from someone else's sonnet. Every subsequent line must contain a word from that quotation--sometimes sonically or visually hidden, but always there somehow.

Susan McLean makes the form even more complicated by using endrhyme thoughout. (Addonizio only rhymes the closing couplet.)

Susan published one recently in Mezzo Cammin, linked here:

"Edna St. Vincent's Malaise"
a sonnenizio on a line from A. E. Stallings's "Clean Break"

And here's an earlier tour de force:

Women's Wear Daily: A Sonnenizio

Slip into something easier to wear.
--Ann Drysdale, "The Self I Made You"

Slip into something easier to wear
than underwear designed to pinch and squeeze.
Recall red grooves from strapless bras you swear
are quite unwearable, the agonies
of welts and jabs from corsets, wear and tear
from straps that chafe and thongs that dig. Forswear
footwear with breakneck tilt, stiletto heels.
Remember: wearing fishnet stocking feels
like walking on small BBs. Be aware
that low-cut tops and short skirts show your wares
with each unwary bend or step upstairs.
The cost of all that software's hard to bear.
It suits his hardware now--will he still care
when years have passed and you're the worse for wear?

That one appears on p. 11 of The Whetstone Misses the Knife, Susan's excellent Donald Justice Prize winning book. Everyone who doesn't have a copy should do themselves a favor and immediately request one from Susan.
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Old 07-06-2018, 11:51 AM
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Julie beat me to mentioning the sonnenizio, a form I have recently enjoyed the challenges of trying to meet. I was intrigued to encounter the sonzal in Amit Majmudar's Dothead. It is a kind of 14-line ghazal that also has elements of a sonnet. Basically, one can do all sorts of variations in which one combines the sonnet with other existing forms. The couplet sonnet is one common option. The space-saver sonnets of George Starbuck are another kind of variation (one-syllable per line). I don't know of any other form than the sonnet that is as adaptable to multiple variations.

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Old 07-06-2018, 12:25 PM
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I've written several Blues Sonnets. This example is not mine but from the 'net:


Our country faces crisis we allowed.
My country faces crisis we allowed.
Our constitution has been disavowed.

With Czars a shadow government’s emerged.
Unchecked, a shadow government’s emerged.
Today our middle class has been submerged.

Our President wants full control right now.
The President wants full control right now.
Our freedom must be put aside somehow.

I write to share my fearful sad lament.
I want to share my fearful sad lament.
The takers want it all, and they’re intent.

We need to muster every thinking vote.
for gimme-mores we know will vote by rote.

(c) Lawrencealot – November 4, 2012


Here's one of mine, Trash Records:


https://www.ablemuse.com/erato/showt...=Trash+Records

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Old 07-06-2018, 02:48 PM
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Thanks. I am really getting an education here.
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Old 07-06-2018, 04:32 PM
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I have a rhymed Shakespearean sonnenizio, "We", coming out in the next issue of Measure.

The first line is from Tim Murphy's Nemerov-winning poem, "The Track of the Storm." The repeated word is "we", mostly hidden in words such as upswept, weather, tower, wearily, weakened, weaponry, dwelling, weep, west, weigh, etc.
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