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Old 09-28-2017, 10:27 PM
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A Red, Red Nose

After Robert Burns, “A Red, Red Rose”

O my lover has a red, red nose
And she can’t sing a tune;
O my lover has a nasal squawk
Just like a lovelorn loon.

So bosomy you are my love,
So racked with lust am I,
That I will love you most, my dear,
When you revere my fly.

When you revere my fly, my dear,
My mind spins like a top
And I will love you more my love
When swiving you won’t stop.

O you did well, my red-nosed love!
But we must rest awhile!
And I will come again, my dear,
So my red nose will smile.

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poe...a-red-red-rose
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Old 09-29-2017, 08:52 AM
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Ralph,

This is great!
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Old 09-29-2017, 06:38 PM
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What Douglas said.
It's humorous that ‘squawk’ should overlay
Such eminent smoothness as this oft-sung lay.
Best
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Old 10-04-2017, 12:27 AM
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Douglas and Erik, thanks for looking in!

I'm chilling at my metaphorical geezers' home, and drooling.

We’re Uncool

Seven old men at the
Goodbye Convalescent

We’re uncool. We
Now drool. We

Eat early. We
Act squirrely. We

Stay up late. We
Fight fate. We

Watch porn. We
Are reborn.

After Gwendolyn Brooks, “We Real Cool”

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poe...2/we-real-cool
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Old 10-07-2017, 03:28 PM
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Hey, that's my life! Don't mock it.
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Old 10-07-2017, 07:09 PM
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I do like that homage to Gwendolyn Brooks.
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Old 10-08-2017, 02:13 AM
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A real verse from a real Valentine card sent by a real poet to a real beloved...

My Love is like a sad old lag
That’s newly sprung from jail
My love is like jiffy bag
Recycled in the mail
But still for you, my bonny lad
They hold what’s tried and true
Though both have weathered good and bad
They still do what they do.

The one is tentative and slow
The other slack and battered
But both have many miles to go
And hold what’s always mattered
And still for you, my bonny lad
My love is tried and true
And though it’s weathered good and bad
It’s always here for you.
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Old 10-08-2017, 03:19 PM
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Red Drivel

My love’s like red, red wine
When fortified,
Port, bold as a stop sign
You must abide.

No, not that red, redbird that flew
Off with a red, red song:
I am resounding a--b-lue,
b-lue--bird all day long!

The red, red storm-alert scared us to death,
Until it proved so often a red-herring
Bellowing doom, it lost all power of scaring:
We ran as much as we now save our breath.
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Old 10-10-2017, 12:05 AM
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Ed, I hear you, hear you like an echo!

John, yes hers is as perfect as it could be.

Ann, yours is lovely and whoever received it was a lucky and I’d bet ever happier lad.

Erik, at the rate you’re revising, you’ll soon have a chapbook of Red on Red?
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